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ponder
response 50 of 178: Mark Unseen   May 4 01:25 UTC 2000

Ooooh  Paul and John, WAY cool poetry.

Paul, that was very good work and nice list.

John, I liked your poem, it had rhythm.  And your list made me laugh.  I 
don't envy the person who decides to take on the challenge.  I have 
feeling this item is going to become something of a personal contest 
between the two of you.  I hope not, but...

Anyway, Good job everybody.  Keep 'em comin'.
remmers
response 51 of 178: Mark Unseen   May 4 11:42 UTC 2000

Thanks.  I was just thinking about the fact that nobody's
done anything yet with my list in #48.
ponder
response 52 of 178: Mark Unseen   May 11 03:59 UTC 2000

Well, that one's something of a toughie.  Maybne they're thinking.  I'll 
ask Jon.  Maybe *he* can come up with something.  After all, I really 
don't want this to end up as duelling poets.

arianna
response 53 of 178: Mark Unseen   May 14 17:51 UTC 2000

<suddenly sees brighn and remmers doing a litle jig to "Dueling Banjos">
remmers
response 54 of 178: Mark Unseen   May 14 19:41 UTC 2000

<remmers hopes someone will get on with this game, someday>
arianna
response 55 of 178: Mark Unseen   May 16 19:02 UTC 2000

My nose has become a crusty condominium,
home to new tenants: a virus, a "bug."
My throat is their wreck room,
my ears ring with clamor
as they move in their sofas, their TVs, their rugs.

This reviled lozenge I suck on brings no relief;
they just laugh as I pucker
on its fake lemon taste.
They burble, now humored, they jiggle with glee,
"Our landlord is naive of our strength, how sweet."

All alone this weekend, with only these foes
and my tender toilet, whom I crouch beside, 
who listens and understands when I pray
for surcease, for my pernicious residents
to abandon their lease.

From the window, I can see my Sonoma,
amorous truck that calls to me.
"Will you be alright, my lady?" it asks.
White ride, you are my predestined horse,
for we go to the doctor on Monday.

---
serious drawls
snug caffine
rudimentary pecan
plastic beansprouts
vicious rubberband

orinoco
response 56 of 178: Mark Unseen   May 16 20:33 UTC 2000

10 points for "surcease" and "toilet" in the same stanza.
remmers
response 57 of 178: Mark Unseen   May 17 11:11 UTC 2000

<remmers LOL at #55.  splendid, splendid!>
lumen
response 58 of 178: Mark Unseen   May 17 21:45 UTC 2000

resp:55 pure genius.. too bad my creative juices are still a bit fried 
or otherwise diverted to other things..
arianna
response 59 of 178: Mark Unseen   May 18 00:01 UTC 2000

<grin>  I didn't think it was all that good...
Are my phrases weird enough for you rowdy lot or do I have to break out some
"heartfelt rudabagas" to appease you?
remmers
response 60 of 178: Mark Unseen   May 18 22:04 UTC 2000

They are sufficiently weird, I think.
arianna
response 61 of 178: Mark Unseen   May 20 14:39 UTC 2000

(just as a sidenote: I saw the phrases "snug caffine" and "serious drawls"
on a flyer for a retro consignment shop in Tallahassee.  The oddity of those
phrases has always nagged at me; they were plopped on the side of the flyer,
seeingly without reason.  so I thought it would be appropriate to use them
here.  if nothing, someone can give me some better insight into how one would
use such combinations in a sensical fashion.)
arianna
response 62 of 178: Mark Unseen   May 23 21:25 UTC 2000

        Just to refresh your memories...

 serious drawls
 snug caffine
 rudimentary pecan
 plastic beansprouts
 vicious rubberband
brighn
response 63 of 178: Mark Unseen   May 23 22:24 UTC 2000

Take me to the midnight cafe,
where the goths skulk
and speak in serious drawls
over their cups of snug caffiene.

I escaped once:
A vicious rubberband has pulled me back
to their den.

In my mind, hippies choke on plastic beansprouts,
lovers devour momentary cyclones,
and the rudimentary pecan fights to free from the freeze

Take me to the midnight cafe
And let me skulk amongst the goths.
brighn
response 64 of 178: Mark Unseen   May 23 22:26 UTC 2000

Intermediate symbiosis
Dry foil
Hypochondriac nemesis
Green sturgeon
Hot ice
lumen
response 65 of 178: Mark Unseen   May 25 00:20 UTC 2000

I am the newest superhero
in a stage of intermediate symbiosis
with a plant-like creature
that gives me renewed strength
in chlorophyllic photosynthesis.

My sidekick is a green sturgeon
that morphs into a dry foil
to battle my evil foe,
a hypochondriac nemesis
who threatens the life of all
bacteria everywhere
with hot ice,
insanely vowing to disinfect the earth
no matter the cost.

(insanely stupid, but hey.. my creativity has suffered under pressure)

fragrant buttcrack
exploding barrel
detachable lips
quiet cacophony
fiery belch
arianna
response 66 of 178: Mark Unseen   May 25 15:09 UTC 2000

<lol>

eeeew!  those phrases are icky!
lumen
response 67 of 178: Mark Unseen   May 25 23:13 UTC 2000

I was so brain-tired at the time that being crass seemed to be an 
appropriately crabby and bellicose response.  I am *so* frustrated.. 
school has been so stressful that my creativity has just been really 
hampered.  So I figured, heh, let them play with that gross crap.

Sorry-- don't take it too personally.  I must be burning the candle at 5 
ends.  (Extra wicks, y'know?)
lumen
response 68 of 178: Mark Unseen   May 25 23:14 UTC 2000

I'm *still* brain-tired.
orinoco
response 69 of 178: Mark Unseen   May 30 17:51 UTC 2000

Returning to Chicago once more
sleep-addled and stunned by catch-that-early-train 
5 am waking
and ready to be pulled brightly out into the sunlight of
bright lights, big city,
ready to feel at home under that skyline,
but first...

...the quiet cacaphony of freight line and steelmill set in.

Gary, Indiana, fragrant buttcrack of Lake Michigan,
rattler of chains, spewer of fumes, awaits.
Not an elegant skyline to be seen, but the contour of smokestacks
pulls the eye uupwards to the morning sun.
Not a hint of gloss, but the dull gleam of rust
and the burnished glow of the lake.
Not a human soul at hand, but pigeons feast,
flatbed trucks convene and converse
and the exploding barrels of gas-carrying train cars
wallow like grim rhinoceroses along the shore.

Not even a touch of familiarity or grace,
and never a brick in sight that feels like home --

but I love it.  I love
the architectural culture shock,
the pollution which swears casually, coolly, like James Dean
lighting another cigarette.  I love the
firey belch of oil-burning smokestacks.

I love the view as we pass by,
and in the haze the entire city seems to be blowing a smoke ring,
exhaling a detatchable pair of lips
which drift skyward with all the cool and class in the world.
arianna
response 70 of 178: Mark Unseen   May 30 21:06 UTC 2000

VERY cool.
orinoco
response 71 of 178: Mark Unseen   May 30 21:19 UTC 2000

Woops, forgot my words....

Sky clippings
Missing knot
Velvet sandwich
Singular forceps
One eye
lumen
response 72 of 178: Mark Unseen   May 31 01:37 UTC 2000

resp:69  Gary, Indiana is the fragrant buttcrack of Lake Michigan?  
Okaaay, I wouldn't know.  That was the only phrase, I suppose, that was 
too crude to be handled more delicately than that.
orinoco
response 73 of 178: Mark Unseen   May 31 01:50 UTC 2000

it's sort of along the same lines as New Jersey being the armpit of the U.S.
arianna
response 74 of 178: Mark Unseen   May 31 19:30 UTC 2000

I've been to Gary, Indiana.  and it truely is the fragrant buttcrack of the
US.
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