| Grex > Poetry > #304: Unsure about the title. |
| response 5 of 8: | 
Apr 25 01:18 UTC 2002 |
Got a suggestion that I could use instead of "funereal", flem?
| response 6 of 8: |
Apr 25 07:24 UTC 2002 |
resp:4 I take it you're not familiar with the "Black Spiral Dancer" reference
| response 7 of 8: |
Apr 25 18:54 UTC 2002 |
No, I'm familiar with it, but it's just not a good title. "The Shoes" is much better. As for something besides funereal... hang on, let me reread #0
| response 8 of 8: |
Apr 25 19:07 UTC 2002 |
Hmm, what I'm coming up with goes along the lines of ... A cold voice whispers of impossibility Funereal music moves my feet In the dance of darkness ... Other possible words for "moves": swirls, whisks, animates, writhes, ... Other possibilities for "funereal": silent, whispering, somber, scaffhold, ... I dunno. :)