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dea
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Insanity
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Apr 13 03:00 UTC 2002 |
Insanity
insanity moves lightning quick
it hits your sanity like a brick
one minute your normal the next your gone
it lulls you with its sweet sad song
drives a man to do things he would never do
when he looks around he sees anything but what's true
insanity gets in by tricking you into believing he is your friend
once he's there you never notice not even in the end
you hurt those around you while he's doing his work
he will destroy your life with nothing more then a little smirk
when he leaves he is never sorry
always he leaves you with the apologies and the worry
in the beginning it rushes hot and fast
it cools and slows only when enough time has past
you feel so skittish and jumpy
then your thoughts and logic becomes lumpy
your heart races
you cant tie your shoe laces
because your car doesn't cook the toast anymore
and you cant remember the last time you walked the door
or why you never receive calls on the remote anymore
and when was the last time you shaved your floor?
AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAhhhhhhhhh I cant take it anymore
my head is soooo goddamn sore
go away you stupid little bore
take your fun to some other door
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morwen
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response 1 of 19:
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Apr 13 03:40 UTC 2002 |
I like the rhyme scheme and I think the rhythm is...interesting.
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jaklumen
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response 2 of 19:
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Apr 14 04:15 UTC 2002 |
heya Damon-- haven't heard from you in.. a long while. How's it going?
I'll have to chew on this for a while. Myself, I'm not a big fan of
neat rhyme and meter. Quirky, though.
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dea
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response 3 of 19:
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Apr 14 16:44 UTC 2002 |
Hey:), things are good, hectic, but good:), i know i know always with the
ryhming, but thats just how my brain works, im not ery good with free flowing
poems
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russ
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response 4 of 19:
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Apr 14 21:50 UTC 2002 |
I like the rhyme scheme. It's a nice contrast to free verse,
and the constraints are sometimes liberating because of the
way they channel the creative process; there are some things
you must do in a given form, so you can think about what you
want to say because you've already decided many of the details
of how you'll say it.
(But what else would you expect from an engineer-poet? ;-)
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jaklumen
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response 5 of 19:
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Apr 15 03:32 UTC 2002 |
heh, let the rhymies have their poetry, then =) I don't do well
rhyming and metering. Structure is good, but not for me.
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flem
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response 6 of 19:
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Apr 15 21:09 UTC 2002 |
"the rhymies"?
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dea
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response 7 of 19:
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Apr 15 23:54 UTC 2002 |
hehheh
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jaklumen
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response 8 of 19:
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Apr 16 09:04 UTC 2002 |
'rhymie'-- anyone who crafts or favors rhyming poetry as opposed to
other styles that don't rhyme.
Much of the masses believe poetry should rhyme. But I am not
necessarily referring to them here.
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brighn
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response 9 of 19:
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Apr 16 13:23 UTC 2002 |
Miss Leann Rimes
You sure should meet her
For Leann rhymes
And uses meter.
I don't think poetry *has* to rhyme and be structured; quite the opposite.
But I also think that free verse is more prone to be abused. There's more to
free
verse than just
funky
line breaks.
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