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The Face
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Feb 3 03:11 UTC 1999 |
Black brown hair hovers at the top of
a medium-tall height,
and dark brown eyes peer out from beneath
thick "Groucho Marx" eyebrows,
which can occasionally twist into a full
paragraph of expression.
Eyes too dark to be "puppy dog,"
and too light to be "black".
Young eyes, often wide, but sometimes
hidden from a bright and squinty sun
by slight shades or thin glasses,
clearing up a slightly fuzzy world and
adding a shade of sophistication.
Moves down to a nose of medium length,
bulbous end, but straight, with
a widening in the middle.
Nostrils, sometimes flared, but
often not, conveying scents and
air to cavernous lungs (which are below our field of study).
Slip-sliding to the sides,
and below the thick dark hair,
with the tops in accordance to the
eyes,
are the ears, of smallish size,
but still in good working condition.
They stick a little but not to far,
and are good for hanging things like eyeglasses,
which they often do.
Follow down the cheek bones,
in strong configuration,
highlighting cheeks,
slightly pocked from teenage
acne, and onto a chin,
slightly fuzzy from lack of shaving,
round, but lacking dimple or cleft.
Glancing back upward to lips,
red from occasional biting,
slightly chapped.
Not full, but not thin,
hanging below the floom (below the nose),
quivering slightly, as if
nervous, while
approaching you.
--Cricket, 2/2/99, 10:11 PM
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orinoco
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Feb 3 03:27 UTC 1999 |
Heck yeah!
I dunno, up until the last 2 stanzas I was thinking "hmm, I'm not so sure
about this". But from "glancing back upward" on, I absolutely love it. The
"off beat" line breaks in the last few lines especially - "as if nervous"
indeed.
So I could poke at the first few stanzas, but really, now that I know what
they're leading up to, I like them a lot better.
Good work.
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