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Small Talk in Intimate Settings, by Cloud
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Jun 2 08:54 UTC 2000 |
"Small Talk in Intimate Settings"
Sitting in a small booth,
looking at menus.
I'm sneaking glances at you-
You cock your head,
Talk about politics.
You talk about the whales,
but I'm 10,000 leagues away,
fathoming the menu, and eyeing the shrimp.
Talk about Hollywood.
New movies, old movies,
New movies made from old movies,
and Tom Cruise,
But I'm looking at a different picture,
the girl in the next booth, the waiter
Talk about food.
My mouth is open
and nothing is coming out;
I want biscuits and gravy.
Now it's drinks, as you take a sip,
watch you're lips, as you
Talk about clothes,
Watch you talk.
Talk.
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cloud
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response 1 of 6:
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Jun 2 08:56 UTC 2000 |
I haven't posted in ages, and in fact this is the first thing I've writtain
in ages, so please let me know what you think.
It's been so long since I last logged on to Grex (to my regret), that my
account was snuffed, and I had to remake it!
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orinoco
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response 2 of 6:
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Jun 2 14:39 UTC 2000 |
You talk about the whales,
but I'm 10,000 leagues away,
fathoming the menu, and eyeing the shrimp.
--nice. You might wanna try to make the connection between what you're doing
and the topic of conversation that clear in all of them -- I think I can find
connections for the other stanzas, but they're not all so obvious, and so it
was a little confusing the first time I read it.
This is cool, though. Something about the tone, I'm not sure what it is, but
it's really nice.
(P.S. "your" not "you're")
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