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bookworm
How I Fly Mark Unseen   Jun 18 15:45 UTC 1999

I am a bird without wings.
As I push myself up out of the watery air
And feel gravity tug uselessly at my stomach,
I marvel at the beauty of the patchwork earth
That covers my sleeping mother in mottled folds
Beneath the soapy clouds.

I am a bird without wings.
My soul climbs high into the night
Finding the torch of inspiration
And lighting its own tiny taper there
To give a golden glow
To the eyes of those who see it.

I am a bird without wings.
My song is a melody of love.
It sings in the heart and the mind.
Every other wingless bird
Hears and takes flight,
Spreading its power to every niche.
             -written 17 June 1999
             -inspired by the trip to Detroit
8 responses total.
lumen
response 1 of 8: Mark Unseen   Jun 18 19:08 UTC 1999

I like this classic style.  Lots of metaphorical imagery.
orinoco
response 2 of 8: Mark Unseen   Jun 19 21:39 UTC 1999

The first stanza rocks - "watery air", "gravity tug uselessly", and "soapy
clouds" are all great phrases, and the whole thing seems to me like a great
description of the queasy/soaring feeling of flying, so it's kind of a
let-down to switch to the whole 'soaring effortlessly' mood of the rest of
the poem.  

Ooh, I just read that first bit again and found another good one.  I love the
way you take the cliche of the earth looking like a patchwork quilt and turn
it around by having someone sleeping under the quilt.  Heck, I just like the
whole first stanza.  
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