Grex Poetry3 Conference

Item 98: "Diseased like us" toking

Entered by toking on Fri Jun 11 16:47:41 1999:

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#4 of 11 by flem on Sun Jun 13 06:24:54 1999:

I'm with orinoco there.  This is a very interesting idea, what it might 
have been like if God had said "let there be understanding" et al., and 
I would like to see it expounded on a little more.  Wax eloquent about 
what life might have been like with love or understanding as the quantum 
of the universe instead of light, if emotion or wisdom ruled instead of 
cold facts.  I think that the idea of God as mistaken, even diseased or 
delusional, makes a good conclusion, but it needs to be stronger and 
probably lengthier.  OTOH, I suspect, if I were to try to work with the 
ideas you suggest, that I might come to a different place and need a 
different conclusion.  You may find that you do also.  

Also, I don't like the line that's just "or".  I think the rhythm and 
the grammar both work better without that line.

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