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Grex Writing Item 202: "Barbed Wire Dance" <by toking>
Entered by toking on Wed Aug 13 00:28:59 UTC 1997:

   There are dark, billuous clouds on the horizon. The drummer boy has put
away his drum sticks, now he plays with knives. And I.... I have not
changed, at least not enough to count. On the outside, some may find it
hard to recognize me. If only they could crawl inside my mind, then they
would remember me. There, in the center of it all, you can still see me.
You can still feel the person that is me.
   Step back, get everything into perspective, and look deeper. Deeper,
not closer. There's a difference you see. Closer will only pull out those
miniscule parts of the act. Deeper is a whole other world. Peel back the
thin layers that cover this chinous shell, find the chinks in the armor,
that is deeper.   
   You must unfocus yourself to go deeper, you have to let it all go. You
see, your shell can not penetrate where mine has disolved. That is the
secret, that is my protection. I can rest when I see your shell hardening,
and must only take defense when yours is down.
   How, you may ask, do I know your shell when I can not lower mine to go
deeper? By looking closer, I would answer. Close enough only to recognize
your act, not so close that I fall in. However, I may pretend to fall, and
this is my weapon. When I fall, you are decieved, you let your shell
pulsate. This is how I learn.
   When your shell pulsates I will touch a tender spot, and you will feel
its pain. This is how I teach, this is how you learn from me. I touch and
you twist away, never letting that spot go unguarded again. I do not teach
for free, my price is part of you, for every spot I touch, I keep a bit
with me. This is how I grow. This is my weakness.
   Those bits I keep change me from without. After a while you will not
recognize me, and then I must begin anew, or move on. I will move on. This
is how I hurt, this is how I feed.

5 responses total.

#1 of 5 by toking on Wed Aug 13 00:30:02 1997:

O.K. this si an old one...but what the hey...what do ya think? 
comments..
criticism..
anyhting?

#2 of 5 by jenna on Wed Aug 13 21:44:31 1997:

I think it's knifty ;}

#3 of 5 by toking on Wed Aug 13 22:27:48 1997:

 any suggestions on making it kniftier?

#4 of 5 by jenna on Fri Aug 15 05:50:52 1997:

lemme think about it

#5 of 5 by toking on Wed Jun 10 17:05:43 1998:

come up with anything yet?

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