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Grex Writing Item 164: In The Service of the Queen
Entered by darklass on Fri Jul 28 12:00:15 UTC 1995:




Knocked down the doorway and she walked in. She stared at me
in my own mirror and seemed to laugh then she turned away
with the grace of a thieve. I brushed my teeth and read
the headline on an old issue of newsweek.
Generalization X. Ah yes those crazy people, I thought. What
do they think they can classify 20 year gaps as generations?
the baby boom, the x'ers the yuppies the boomlet they
were all children of the space age and they all watched
rock and bulwinkel and I love Lucy
and what more was their to say. It was odd that i
thought that because i was part of the youngest of that
group.
I went on brushing my teeth.
the lady came back and sat down onthe counter in the mirror and wa
watching me.
i looked up at her. she looked into my eyes. she wasn't
laughing this time.
"How are you?" I asked her.
Her eyes were green and she looked at me.
She smiled and shrugged. She was open. She was chiseled. Her
skin was even plaer than mine and mien was plae.
She reached out and touched my face.
Then she smiled

She hated everyone.
But she didn't hate me.
ANd I shoudl have hated her. But I didn't.
M'lady.
I say to her. And I bowed
And she laughed and said I shoudln't bow
that we were unable to coexist
though we had the same face
and now the mirror and time serpated us
and i was safe
she promised me i was safe.

i finsihed brushing my teeth and took a shower.
she didn't say anyrthing about you.
it is sad
i could save you you know...I have it somewhere wihtin me
to take down all these walls and stp the wordl from spinning
for a minute or two. certainly enough to safge you.
but once i let that power come i'll turn into the
very woamn i am trying to save you from
so either i watch you die
or kill you myself

she said i was safe
she didn't say anything about you

6 responses total.

#1 of 6 by chelsea on Fri Jul 28 13:54:14 1995:

I really like this.

#2 of 6 by anne on Fri Jul 28 14:58:13 1995:

Me too... I like the mystery in it....   M'Lady sounds like a
character that I have, so I'm biased... :)

#3 of 6 by shade on Tue Aug 1 07:41:50 1995:

thanks

#4 of 6 by shade on Fri Aug 4 11:19:56 1995:

i would just like to say something though
probably nobody else will read this ever again:

the "you" who is being spoken to is neko
and i am saying this cause he said he wished he could but
felt he could not he asked me not to but
i am doing it way because i think he wants
people to know. so if anyone bothers to read
this little piece and this little response
know then that is was written to him

love,
jenne

#5 of 6 by arianna on Thu Feb 8 01:58:04 1996:

Who's neko?
Lovely, Jenna.  Calls forth desperation and resignation...but isn't that the
eternal paradox of things...

#6 of 6 by shade on Fri Feb 9 06:46:54 1996:

neko was someone I loved very much for a very short while. 
this story is,essentially about me, though

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