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Grex Writing Item 134: *In a Small Small Room* Eric Shirley...
Entered by fraizer on Thu Apr 13 19:01:56 UTC 1995:

Tumbling
Reeling
In a small small room
Numbness
Feeling
In a small small room
Time in a broken bottle
Doesn't do much
Not much
In a small small room
I left the world today
But I'll be back again
Back again
In a small small room
I look for you
Trees falling
I can hear them all
In a small small room
No where to run to
No place to hide
No where to find you
No place to look
 No love for me
In a small small room

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#1 of 4 by morgayn on Fri Apr 14 13:23:46 1995:

As I said before, Fraizer, I REALLY like this poem...
  The repitition you use for the word 'small' really makes one feel cramped
and jammed into a small room...the references you make throughout the poem
really exemplify what one feels like when they are trapped and in desperate
need of escape...
*Morgayn smiles*
I finally get the chance to return the compliments. :)

#2 of 4 by kami on Mon Apr 17 03:46:45 1995:

gaaagh!  Feels like being on a psych ward- or needing one...Wow!  Well done.

#3 of 4 by fraizer on Mon Apr 17 16:00:02 1995:

*BLUSH* thanx Melly.

kami: thanx, that was the feeling I was trying for. Sometimes the
confines of your own mind are far worse than any four wals could be.
er.."walls"

#4 of 4 by morgayn on Thu Apr 20 00:21:53 1995:

I agree, Eric. I definately agree. The human mind can definately be confining.

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