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Grex Poetry Item 90: Two roses
Entered by woman on Sun May 23 04:17:46 UTC 1999:

Two roses

Two roses.....two people
so much pain
when there should be
Joy

Tears and darkness
no way out
when there should be
Sunshine and laughter

Echoes in empty halls
Voices tearing at the soul
when there should be
Warm tender embraces
Love filling the heart

Angry claws pulling deeper
into the hungry vortex
when there should be
Wings stretching, soaring
in flight.

7 responses total.

#1 of 7 by toking on Sun May 23 20:34:53 1999:

ACK!!!!!  I like what's here...but it seems way too unfinished....

#2 of 7 by woman on Mon May 24 02:32:36 1999:

I agree with unfinished..too rough...I thought I'd post it anyway.

#3 of 7 by lumen on Wed Jun 2 03:16:07 1999:

It has potential.

#4 of 7 by flem on Fri Jun 4 02:29:59 1999:

I kept waiting for the rose metaphor to come back.  The image of two 
beautiful roses, tangled in each other's thorns, is too appropriate to 
the subject to be left undeveloped.

#5 of 7 by woman on Fri Jun 4 05:17:48 1999:

I am outta words at the moment so maybe that's why it just stopped.

#6 of 7 by bookworm on Thu Jun 17 20:19:38 1999:

Most poems just stop themselves dear.  I think the unfinished feeling adds
meaning.  You know like there should be some sort of closure in the
relationship discussed above, but there isn't.  The two people just go on
being close and being unhappy.  I've known relationships that were like that
for quite a while.

#7 of 7 by lumen on Thu Jun 17 20:37:41 1999:

Of course, the work is finished when the artist says it is.

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