"forever"

grey I burn
twisted or twisting
falling like it's flying
and trying not to stop
calling and calling
and I know you don't hear
but I can't stop
I won't stop
nothing can make me
nothing can force me
I won't forget again
I can't let it die again
twisted or twisting
living or dying
the difference is so minute
the more you look
the more you want
I've got one 
I don't need the other
so
STOP
look me in the eye
do you see what's hiding
do you see what's fallen
what's falling or flying
or fleeing
it's more that I am
more than I could ever be
look at it
recognize it
forget it and forget everything
simply remember forever

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OO.  I get to be first?

This is highly interesting work, Joe.

It reads like a fast thought.
I particularly like this part:

"but I can't stop
I won't stop
nothing can make me
nothing can force me
I won't forget again
I can't let it die again..."

Joe, I'm going to plead once again-- once you have music to your poetry, 
and it is recorded, send it to us.  Please.  As a lover of music and as 
an aspiring music educator, I'm just drooling with anticipation to hear 
your songwriting skills take flight.  This style of poetry fits you like 
a glove, and I can't wait to hear it realized.  This poem is another 
fine example. 

Hmmm....I like this.  The pairs of words ("twisted or twisting", "falling
like it's flying", etc.) are cool, and I like the way they repeat
throughout the poem - it kind of holds it together.  And FWIW, I second
Jon's usual plea.  If nothing else, make yrself some music to read this
over.

I third the motion.  I want to hear the music for this also.

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