Insanity

insanity moves lightning quick
it hits your sanity like a brick
one minute your normal the next your gone
it lulls you with its sweet sad song
drives a man to do things he would never do
when he looks around he sees anything but what's true
insanity gets in by tricking you into believing he is your friend
once he's there you never notice not even in the end
you hurt those around you while he's doing his work
he will destroy your life with nothing more then a little smirk
when he leaves he is never sorry
always he leaves you with the apologies and the worry
in the beginning it rushes hot and fast
it cools and slows only when enough time has past
you feel so skittish and jumpy
then your thoughts and logic becomes lumpy
your heart races
you cant tie your shoe laces
because your car doesn't cook the toast anymore
and you cant remember the last time you walked the door
or why you never receive calls on the remote anymore
and when was the last time you shaved your floor?
AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAhhhhhhhhh I cant take it anymore
my head is soooo goddamn sore
go away you stupid little bore
take your fun to some other door

19 responses total.

I like the rhyme scheme and I think the rhythm is...interesting.

heya Damon-- haven't heard from you in.. a long while.  How's it going?

I'll have to chew on this for a while.  Myself, I'm not a big fan of 
neat rhyme and meter.  Quirky, though.

Hey:), things are good, hectic, but good:), i know i know always with the
ryhming, but thats just how my brain works, im not ery good with free flowing
poems

I like the rhyme scheme.  It's a nice contrast to free verse,
and the constraints are sometimes liberating because of the
way they channel the creative process; there are some things
you must do in a given form, so you can think about what you
want to say because you've already decided many of the details
of how you'll say it.

(But what else would you expect from an engineer-poet? ;-)

heh, let the rhymies have their poetry, then =)  I don't do well 
rhyming and metering.  Structure is good, but not for me.

"the rhymies"?  

hehheh

'rhymie'-- anyone who crafts or favors rhyming poetry as opposed to 
other styles that don't rhyme.

Much of the masses believe poetry should rhyme.  But I am not 
necessarily referring to them here.

Miss Leann Rimes
You sure should meet her
For Leann rhymes
And uses meter.
 
I don't think poetry *has* to rhyme and be structured; quite the opposite.
But I also think that free verse is more prone to be abused. There's more to
free
verse than just
funky
line breaks.

I understood what you meant by the term; I was questioning your choice to use
it that way.  

There are many ways to fail to understand poetry.  One such way is by thinking
it all should rhyme.  Another such way is by denigrating those who understand
and enjoy rhymed poetry.  

I think there are lots of people that favor what might justifiably be 
called the classical style of poetry writing (ie making clever use of 
rhyme and mater to aid in getting an idea across to the reader)

Personally, I don't believe that there really *is* a "right way" to 
write poetry.  There are good ways to write better poetry and I think 
that poetry should have a certain flow, but that is my opinion.

It's like Jon and his ideas about music.  My Dad will say that "rock 
and roll" is not music.  He prefers the genre called "classical music" 
which is basically instrumental and choral orchestra music.  Jon, on 
the other hand, will argue that my father is mistaken and is pushing 
his opinion off on other people.  He will say that butt rock is music, 
even if I don't like it.

This coincides with my beliefs about poetry.  If it is billed as 
poetry, it is probably poetry, even if I don't like it.  

I'm not quite sure I'm willing to go so far as to grant the status of poetry
to anything that claims it, much as I'm not willing to agree with people who
pile their trash in little heaps, photograph it, and call me stupid for not
appreciating their profound artistic statement.  But in either case, it's 
really not worth arguing about it in most cases.  
  What's more productive, I think, is to examine different kinds of things
that are unquestionably poetry (or art) and try to express different ways
in which things can succeed in being poetry.  

<shrug> Just stating personal opinion

Re #11:  When you consider that one of the big uses of poetry
was in the transmission of oral history, rhyming and meter have
an obvious function.  They are mnemonic devices which provide
"glue" to hold the piece together over time and between carriers.

As proof of this, let me try to repeat one of my old pieces without
looking at the original.  I can't recall the exact title (it was
something like "Ode to the dinner date from hell"), but it goes:

It wouldn't be so hard to meet
New people if you'd only just
Quit bitching 'bout the kind of seat
And over dinner stop your fuss.

You would likely make more friends
If you went seeking company
Instead of making clear your ends
Are only to get laid for free.

Friends are not to boss around
Nor nose into their privacy
So if you run a man to ground
Be quite assured it won't be me.

The above 3 stanzas are probably present elsewhere in this conference.
I'll let someone else compare the two and see if they differ.  Try *that*
with blank verse after not looking at it for a few years. ;-)

resp:9  Perhaps so, but I've heard some really bad rhyming poetry, by 
the general populace.

resp:10  whoa, you couldn't catch that I wasn't uberserious in my 
criticism?  Perhaps you've forgotten I've praised remmers for many of 
his offerings, and I don't think I've ever seen a poem of his that 
*doesn't* rhyme.  Me, I've only said rhyme and meter is really 
difficult for me to use, and the latter I don't quite get.  I can't 
hear the rhythm in my usual reading.  Maybe if I read it aloud.

Rhyme and meter is easier for me if I have musical accompaniment.

Yea, verily.  I must think and work diligently to make rhyme and meter 
work.  I admire those that are able to do so, but as for me, I much 
prefer free-verse.

Wee i enter a need for sleep induced poem and i gets a debate of rhyme against
rhyme. i myself i love both types, one of my favorite poems is the Oddesy,
which obviusly dosnt rhyme

not in translation.. does it rhyme in Greek?

No.  It's driven primarily by rhythm.  I don't think they practice 
rhyme in Greek poetry.  At least not in epic poetry, as per the Iliad 
and the Oddysey.

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