Please, do not pity me.
I am doing just fine.
There is no one standing over my head,
telling me who I need to be.
I do not need your clothes,
your perfume,
your cars.
I do not need Designer anything.
All I need is myself,
and our Creator.
I do not need to show my hair,
to think and breathe.
I only cover my beauty,
but not who I am.
I do not need my legs,
to do a better presentation.
Nor make-up,
to improve my ccommunication skills.
They teach you how to do a firm hand-shake.
How to look into peoples eyes.
Why does this man need to touch my small hand,
it will not change our business.
It will only make him,
more comfortable,
with touching me.
It lessens the personal space between us.
Only one man, 
one alone,
he doeserves all my beauty,
all the beauty in a female, and her sensuality,
her sexuality,
Only he should see the depths of her eyes,
all the small colors the swim within the sea of green.
Only he should know, the softness of my hands,
my skin, and the warmth they bring.
The business suit undermines me.
My mind is my skill, my tool.
I am not marketing myself,
nor bargaining myself.
I am not selling the image of me
in my Aramani suit.
So if you wish to spend form what
you work so hard to earn.
To be someone you are not,
or to convince youself you are,
then waste away. 
You cannot cover who you are inside,
While I can cover my body,
but who I really am,
stands out even more.

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I believe people are not as comfortable with something as they'd like to think
when they need to convince others that they are comfortable.

huh????
Implying I am not comforable with myself?
'cause if thats the case, I am not trying tpo convince anyone of anything
here..its writing..

You don't wanna know what I"m implying.

Actually, I'm not sure I'd classify it as an implication so much as a direct
accusation...
*shrug* 

I think the previous one was better than htis at conveying this idea.
But keep trying.  

*giggle* thanks flem!! :) Perhaps I should stop writing!!!hehe
,

Well, I agree with flem that the two poems cover much of the same ground. 
There are bits of both I like, and you could probably get some good milage
out of combining them.  

yeah..I thought of that..I dind't like the frist one, so I attempted writing
a second...and failed twice!! Some things are hard to write in a good way..

you didn't fail exactly.
there's potential, and where there's a seed, somethign will grow.

resp:5 resp:7  that's an idea.

Both poems were good, but the idea of combining them.. hmm.. 
yeah, maybe that will yield something more.

I've realized, Megan, that writing is a continual process-- my work 
has changed so much since I started here.  Keep it up; watching 
someone's potential flower and bloom is as much fun as 
breathing in the final results.  I think that observing the process 
gives one a reason to appreciate strides even more.

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