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Grex Poetry Item 207: Goodbye
Entered by toww on Tue Aug 29 15:58:36 UTC 2000:

Now that you have gone away
I think of you and my eyes get moist
Why couldn't I have held on
Why did I let you go

You went away without making a sound
You did not even say goodbye
I kept thinking you would comback
because you had never gone this way before

Your thoughts kept coming
and I couldn't sleep
I started to cry
only to be stopped by the thought
that maybe you are still nearby
I would give you a call
and you would comeback running
I would hold you
not let you go this time

I had promised not to call you out loud
lest somebody heard
So I whispered your name incessantly
hoping that you would hear
But you never heard my heart's cry
however much I tried

I saw you oneday on the way
and wanted to wave
but again I remembered my promise
and stopped, standing where I was
just waiting for you to see me
but I was hoping against hope
my mind whispered to me
that you are looking for a fresh start
and won't comeback again
but I shut it up...
how could I hear such a thing!

So today when I saw you again
I could not stop from asking you why?
And you paused and
gave a reply
a reply I had told you, I feared
My heart stopped
and I could not even cry
So I hurriedly said goodbye
and even you had to go
But in this short tryst with destiny
I saw a feeling of sadness in your eyes
You were sympathising
But I wasn't going to show you my emotions this time

And I wished you the best for your new start
I hope you will always be happy
It was too much to ask of you!

But I do have a right to cry
and I cried the whole night
I cried and I prayed to God
to take away the pain
and then cried again

I had felt your pain 
and made them my own
and I had cried when you cried
hoping that just maybe you would smile
and only thing I wanted for you was happinness
I never had any right to ask you to stay
So i wish that maybe this time
pain wouldn't touch you
but please allow me to feel sad and cry!

4 responses total.



#1 of 4 by eqbalz on Tue Aug 29 16:04:12 2000:

Why do you write such poetry man? Hopeless to say the least! anyway maybe you
will become a good writer one day :) Don't be so sad and write some cheerful
things and you should not belittle your heart for those who go away.


#2 of 4 by toww on Thu Aug 31 13:52:46 2000:

Hello Eqbal, 
Well whatever it is, they are my words. So take it or leave it!
Maybe I'll write something cheerful for you sometime when I have the mood for
it!
thanks anyway for your comments.


#3 of 4 by arianna on Wed Sep 20 23:18:23 2000:

wow.  that was amazing.  resp:1 says "yuck" and then bolsters the poet; 
resp:2 accepts the opinion for what it's worth and thanks resp:1 for 
their comment.  


#4 of 4 by lumen on Thu Sep 21 06:54:50 2000:

It's good to write sad poetry sometimes.

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