My first shot at poetry:-)
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I fear I might fall,
perhaps I have already.
I wish I have a friend forever
No one has been for long ever
I was afraid of coming near you
but my heart refused to agree...

I felt happy though and cheerful
and I refused to listen to my head.
I am playing wantonly and feeling happy
like a child who doesn't know...
his playing hour is about to end

 my mind whispers to me
and that fear comes back again

I want to say more my friend but...
my heart has lost this small fight with me again!

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Since there have not been any response till now, I would assume this was bad
poetry. :)
So I would guess, I better keep my hands of it ;)

eh... never assume anything about a lack of comments. most poems are only
passingly commented on, if at all, and when I comment, it's usually negative.

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I am taking this as encouragement then, Paul. ;)
Folks, be prepared to tolerate some more of this kind...!

its nice..!!! Cute..innocent! :) keep at it!

Really!!! (my). What an irony! (sorry, you wont understand :). I have read
your poems (freedom) and in a way they are my inspiration! Thanks.

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