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Grex Poetry Item 159: The falcon eyes.
Entered by behlal on Wed Dec 15 21:43:02 UTC 1999:

Through the eyes fo a falcon.
The world is sharp and green.
Through the eyes of a falcon.
The world is all seen.
Through the eyes of a falcon.
That is my dream.

3 responses total.

#1 of 3 by behlal on Wed Dec 15 21:50:40 1999:

Well, I forgot to tell you all that that is, well the first poem I have
written, so well it probably suck bigtime compared to your masterpieces. But
please give me feedback anyway so I can grow. :) Thank you.

#2 of 3 by freedom on Sun Dec 19 20:47:28 1999:

actually, I kinda like it  :) Would like it a bit longer personally, but sme
people like short poetry.."the world is all seen" line for some reason bugs
me, too short? forced to rhyme..can't quite put my finger on it...

#3 of 3 by orinoco on Mon Dec 20 04:40:06 1999:

Well, it isn't specific.  It could mean "the world is everything that is
seen," or it could mean "the world is entirely seen."  Maybe that's what's
bugging you?

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