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Grex Poetry Item 124: Fear, A Poem.
Entered by mlf on Sat Aug 14 23:55:27 UTC 1999:

Please  comment on my poem, recently published. 
Fear

Fear trembles like driftwood
within the walls of a cistern well
with every action or motion  around it
drawn down in centrifugal force
riveted to the drain
breathless, lifeless, hopeless,
waiting for the rescue that never comes
for its source is fear itself

11 responses total.

#1 of 11 by mlf on Sat Aug 14 23:58:30 1999:

Hi, I would like to introduce a new user (newuser mlf) who has just learned
to use grex and likes to write poetry.  (This is keesan typing).  Please
introduce yourselves briefly here, thanks.

#2 of 11 by dea on Mon Aug 16 11:39:21 1999:

hey:) im damon a crazy weird little kid that is always around here some would
say i share a lung with grex.
 i read items in agora all the time but rarely conjure up the courage to type a
 response in my typo infested lang.

i am a big fan of poetry and write some of my own allthough i almost never post
it anywhere where an numbe of people will see it.

other then that not much to tell i guess kinda sad i guess

#3 of 11 by dea on Mon Aug 16 11:40:33 1999:

oh and i like to say "hrm" and "i guess" alot

#4 of 11 by toking on Mon Aug 16 13:29:34 1999:

I like this piece..good show

#5 of 11 by lumen on Mon Aug 16 23:07:47 1999:

So you got this published?  Neat.



I like the imagery here and the word choices that reinforce it.



"within the walls of a cistern well" and "drawn down in centrifugal force" are
especially good phrases.



I take it the phrase "its source is fear itself" suggests a vicious cycle, or
self-destructiveness?  I can't tell, because at first look, the concept seems
awkward.



Welcome, mlf, and enjoy your stay..it looks like you have much to share with
us. =)

#6 of 11 by orinoco on Sat Aug 21 03:19:34 1999:

"within the walls of a cistern well" - yeah, that's cool.

I'm Dan.  Once upon a time I posted a lot here; I seem to have fallen behind.

#7 of 11 by keesan on Sun Sep 5 15:52:51 1999:

I will remind Peg to look at this conference item again.

#8 of 11 by mlf on Wed Sep 15 23:37:05 1999:

 Thanks for your interest in the poem Sindi urged me to enter even though it
was ad lib and not actual literal published version as I was not at my home
desk.  Never thought I could write poetry, much less get published.  This was
just a catharsis and means of expressing my personal observations and also
experiences.  The actual completed and published poem goes like this:     
Fear                                                                      
Fear trembles like driftwood                                              
Pounding furiously and frantically                                        
Against the inside walls of a cistern well                                
With every rippling action or motion around it                            
Drawn down in centifugal force                                            
Riveted to the drain                                                      
Breathless, lifeless, hopeless                                            
Waiting for the rescue that never comes                                   
As its source is fear itself.                                             
Poet's comments: Yes, beleive fear is a vicious circle and paralyzing. The
worst disability by far is in failing to take risks to stand up for what is
real, true, good. Preserving integrity and principles rather than selling out
to the status quo regardless of the popularity "ripples" around and about us
and meeting even the most difficult of life's challenges head on with courage
and fortitude and trust gives the greatest measure of hope and freedom to the
human spirit. "Carpe diem!" "seize the day" for truly, we may not pass this
way again.  Anyway, this journaled "poem " helped motivate me through a very
frustrating and discouraging walk-in fact, it still does...Someone encouraged
me to enter the poem, the rest was history.  Hope it touches others in a
positive way. Glad you are here to read this, and glad I am privileged to be
here, sharing with each of you.  Sincerely, mlf.

#9 of 11 by mlf on Sat Oct 23 22:23:57 1999:

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#10 of 11 by cloud on Tue Dec 28 09:21:36 1999:

I'm Josh, I haven't read, much less posted, any messages for what must be
ages.  School got in the way, took a death grip on my life, and throttled me.

#11 of 11 by lumen on Wed Jan 12 02:10:05 2000:

It happens all the time.

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