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lumen
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response 20 of 178:
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Mar 28 21:09 UTC 2000 |
resp:12 Thanks-- I asked Julie and she did request that phrases be
kept intact as to preserve their full meaning.
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ponder
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response 21 of 178:
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Mar 29 02:53 UTC 2000 |
resp:8 and resp:9
I'll allow it.
The original intent *was* to keep the words together, though. Still,
Whatever your imaginations suggest works so long as you stay well within
the framwork originally suggested in the rules.
Lots of good stuff here.
BTW resp:9 you have a point there, Paul. Let's try to use these words
so that they more or less modify each other. Still, I'm not picky.
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ponder
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response 22 of 178:
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Mar 29 03:12 UTC 2000 |
Creeping forth, the bombastic snail
Slid on one foot into the cold night.
Frost lined everything with feathers
Even the darkening sky
And it's one hungry star.
The proud slug flexed his tiny brain
On this quaking conumdrum,
Even though his brain had less texture
Than a worn-out, flexible prune.
Finding no answer he trudged back inside
Wending his slow way like a sad locomotive.
*Next list:*
icy flames
simple frustration
blue wishes
worn words
winged kisses
***This one probably isn't as good as the others.***
***BTW feel free to comment briefly on the poems before your own.***
***The whole idea is to know how well we're doing.***
***I like all I've seen so far.***
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arianna
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response 23 of 178:
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Mar 29 17:20 UTC 2000 |
Actually, I liked that one, it was cool.
You used the word "brain" in one line and then used it again in the next,
however, and I tend to dislike that kind of repatition.
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ponder
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response 24 of 178:
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Mar 29 23:53 UTC 2000 |
Me too. I suppose I could've said cerebrum or mind instead.
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flem
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response 25 of 178:
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Mar 30 17:11 UTC 2000 |
(As usual, orinoco's offering amazed me. :)
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lumen
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response 26 of 178:
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Apr 6 00:00 UTC 2000 |
I agree with Erinn, Julie; that was cool.
I think your game has done much for you: someone makes a list of odd
imagery, and you are going to excellent creative lengths to make them
part of a cohesive work.
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arianna
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response 27 of 178:
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Apr 18 01:05 UTC 2000 |
I have worn words, calmly. But the ones you
illustrate upon me spread like icy flames, then
flood my ears. Welling up from within,
I fumble with floating blue wishes
that are ebullient suddenly, jettisoned
by the force of your simple frustration.
Clothed in biting consonants, each utterance
can be beared only by the winged kisses of your
pauses for breath.
Please, let's not fight anymore.
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orinoco
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response 28 of 178:
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Apr 18 06:54 UTC 2000 |
Ooh, I like....
(New phrases?)
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arianna
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response 29 of 178:
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Apr 18 14:45 UTC 2000 |
working on it.
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arianna
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response 30 of 178:
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Apr 18 18:27 UTC 2000 |
black bread
noontime sunshine
long task
cold ground
vivid violet
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remmers
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response 31 of 178:
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Apr 18 20:25 UTC 2000 |
(Those are so sensible I can hardly deal with them.)
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arianna
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response 32 of 178:
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Apr 19 22:09 UTC 2000 |
uh...
I'm not sure if he's being sarcastic or serious -- someone please translate
for me so I can eithe rlaugh at him or tell him to sod off? [:
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orinoco
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response 33 of 178:
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Apr 19 22:27 UTC 2000 |
They are pretty straightforward pairs of words. I've probably used all of
them before and not even realized it.
I got half a poem....the other half is coming up in a day or two, unless
someone beats me to it.
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arianna
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response 34 of 178:
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Apr 19 23:28 UTC 2000 |
I didn't set out to pick obnoxiously difficult phrases like "heartfelt
rudabaga." In fact, I just picked random phrases out of a book.
If you don't like my approach to picking the new pairs, just remember:
I don't care. <sunshiny smile>
Since my phrases are so *easy* Dan, I expect nothing less than perfection from
you. d=
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orinoco
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response 35 of 178:
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Apr 19 23:40 UTC 2000 |
(Ooh, I rather like "heartfelt rutabaga")
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remmers
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response 36 of 178:
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Apr 20 10:22 UTC 2000 |
(Right, it's deliciously non-sensible.)
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arianna
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response 37 of 178:
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Apr 20 14:48 UTC 2000 |
bah, humbug.
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brighn
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response 38 of 178:
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Apr 20 15:16 UTC 2000 |
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brighn
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response 39 of 178:
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Apr 20 15:18 UTC 2000 |
Actually, if I may quote from the rules:
"The adjective must imaginatively describe the noun in a completely new way."
So, technically, your method of picking phrases violates the rules, since
you're picking phrases that are already in print.
*sweet smile*
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arianna
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response 40 of 178:
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Apr 20 20:48 UTC 2000 |
"All words
are borrowed,
and in use
are returned."
The english language has been around a long time, I'm sure all the
"imaginative" phrases ahev already been used. So one might argue that this
whole exercise, if bent ont hat purpose alone, would be a lesson in futility.
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brighn
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response 41 of 178:
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Apr 20 21:58 UTC 2000 |
Actually, I can prove mathematically that there exist a large number of
phrases which have never been used. But the portion of those which are
two-word phrases is likely relatively small.
All the same, there are 180,000 entries in my college dictionary. If a quarter
of those are nouns and a quarter of those are adjectives, that leaves roughly
about 2 billion adjective-noun phrases. That's an awful lot.
Furthermore, I'm just tweakin' ya, I broke the rules myself (and I'll break
'em again, dangit ;} )
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remmers
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response 42 of 178:
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Apr 20 21:59 UTC 2000 |
I am certain that "heartfelt rutabaga" has never been used before.
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arianna
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response 43 of 178:
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Apr 21 01:09 UTC 2000 |
then by all means, include it in your next list o' phrases. consider it a
gift from the font of all obnoxious phrases, Erinn. <giggle>
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brighn
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response 44 of 178:
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Apr 21 06:06 UTC 2000 |
"obnoxious font" may also be on the list of never used, although perhaps it's
on the list of seldom used. ;}
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