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zoe
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a haunting past....
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Feb 5 00:34 UTC 1999 |
"now take this.."
pushed to the ground,
crushed by 190 pounds of sheer anger...
held down--
helpless and small...
"now you'll get what you want,"
"i know exactly what you want.."
screaming gives me bruises,
crying gets me a broken nose...
never ending--
thrusts,
painful motions,
being driven into the dirt...
"this is what you like, isn't it?"
"you think you're so perfect, well i don't see it.."
whimpering under my breath..
is this what i'm here for...
please let this end,
please let it go away...
i slash his face
"YOU MONSTER!!"
a blade to my throat..
heavy breathing--
i have stirred the demons within him a little too much..
"you fucking whore.."
"you fucking bitch!!!"
thrown head-first into a cold brick wall,
unconcious and left for dead...
take away this horror--
let me live as i once did...
make his aweful face disappear from my nightmares...
let me be whole again.
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zoe
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response 1 of 27:
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Feb 5 00:40 UTC 1999 |
i thought i'd feel better after i posted this... i've had this in my
head for too long, its about time i let go and try to go back to life..
i don't know... it's not very poetic, but its been eating away at my
soul, one of the many monsters inside me that i needed to expose.. and
joe, i told you it wasn't pleasant so don't be all weird with me.
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bookworm
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response 2 of 27:
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Feb 5 04:48 UTC 1999 |
Good heavens, Zoe. This poem is very emotional. Obviously, you and Joe
are poets of the same school. Did posting this help you feel better?
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toking
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response 3 of 27:
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Feb 5 10:44 UTC 1999 |
....
define wierd
I think mayhap we should discuss this, elsewhere, but we should discuss
this.
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lumen
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response 4 of 27:
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Feb 5 23:42 UTC 1999 |
Saints have mercy. I hope this isn't real-life inspired?
you may reply privately by e-mail, if you wish..my direct address is in
my .plan file.
Good heavens, this is creepy. Zoe, I hope you do know that we care
here, and we are supportive if you are writing about real life events.
(Poetry can be very theraputic.)
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cloud
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response 5 of 27:
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Feb 6 01:06 UTC 1999 |
On the other hand, if everyone is falling into the trap of Biographical
>Fallicy, than you have my permission, as mr. Mannors, to tell 'em to shove
>off. Actually, you have my permission to anyway.
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>Guys, can you please focus on the poem alone and try not to read into the
>author's life from it? It can be rather damaging, in my oh so humble
>opinion. See, I'll sometimes post something that is _partially_ based on
real
>life, partially not. If someone starts speculating that the peice in
question
>is really about me, I tend to be embarressed into not entering new items.
And yes, I have read the poem. Generally speaking I, too, find it very
disconcerting, owing to the strong language, intense pace, and taboo- nay,
shocking,- subject matter. I can't honestly say I like it, but I get the
feeling that this isn't a piece to be liked, if you see my point.
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zoe
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response 6 of 27:
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Feb 7 04:20 UTC 1999 |
life is pain...
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logansan
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response 7 of 27:
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Feb 7 21:58 UTC 1999 |
My fellow poet/artist .... I offer you what ever little comfort I
might. my best wishes and toughts. There is more to life than pain. Your words
have done so much for me, even this peice of raw force, blunt trama .... it's
taken me close to two days to get back here to make a 'r'.
You are one of the best, zoe frost, I salute you.
signed; John
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