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davel
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a poem
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Oct 4 00:26 UTC 1992 |
INTEGRAL FORMULAS
All points are determined by circles: and the paths
reversed invert space return time.
We hiked up by
Devil's Thumb past an abandoned mine a gaping mouth
framed by rotting timber teeth. All around the sky
yawned empty as abruptly we came clear of pines
onto spare tufts of grass. Ahead the stone grew high
in a great arch the Romans never reached a vane
set on a wide rim from which we saw revelaed
the analytic pattern of the valley: life-line
stream and heart-line road crossed the cupped palm whose thumb scaled
up to size rose up ahead at an angle
beyond mere human flexibility.
Time had wheeled
around to bring me there again in the full
face of a five-year circle in life begun
with chime-peal childish laughter:
eyes still obey the pull
of a Gothic spire of grey granite to run
again to sky; they know there is no time or past,
only a helix around the axial sun.
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davel
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response 1 of 4:
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Oct 4 00:27 UTC 1992 |
(This, & any other poem I'm likely to enter, is kind of old - like around
25 years old. Sorry, folks, the stream's been flowing in other channels.)
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chelsea
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response 2 of 4:
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Oct 4 17:41 UTC 1992 |
I like the content but try as I may, I can't see the why
of that layout. What am I missing?
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davel
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response 3 of 4:
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Oct 4 23:52 UTC 1992 |
(First: rereading, I see I misspelled "revealed" when I typed it in.)
- Regarding content: some of the (central) allusions are obscure enough
to be presumably invisible; I won't go into them unless great demand
appears - anyone who notices them (any mathematicians?) may do so.
- Regarding form: you *did* get as far as noticing that it's a somewhat
mutated _terza rima_? If not, that may be enough ... as for the eccentric
whitespace, I sort of see what I was up to, but why bother? (This kind of
thing is why I only entered this one instead of a couple of others - after
all these years I think some of what I was doing was good & makes sense, but
some of it
some of it's positively embarrassingly sophomoric. (And I was a junior or
senior for most of it :-) .))
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nistel
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response 4 of 4:
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Nov 8 16:44 UTC 1996 |
boy ! what was all that ? Or is it that I'm too dumb to understand ?
It was hard stuff I must admit... And a lot of what was written went well over
my head. But yeah, it takes talent to write like this. Though I wont pass
any judgement because its beyond my forte, I'd like to say: If you could, do
soften it up a wee bit. I sincerelywant to understand.
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