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Grex > Writing > #133: Poem #1 written 4-7-95 by Morgayn | |
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morgayn
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Poem #1 written 4-7-95 by Morgayn
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Apr 12 20:50 UTC 1995 |
Softness in your touch,
Gentility in your style.
Glittering and melting together
Water, air and fire
Met your soul.
Your dancing eyes
Clearly express the wonder, the joy
You exude.
Just looking into
Your ever-changing eyes
Brings me happiness.
The words you speak
Flow from your mouth soft as a spring breeze.
Blanketing me,
Soothing me.
Wrapping me in wholeness,
I am relaxed in your presence.
Somtimes,
The firelight
Which burns deep within you
Surfaces...
Passion, energy, childish curiousity...
Without this part of you,
The scales remain unbalanced.
With this part comes the life
The love
The softness
Which is you.
Your eyes of forrest
Remain a mystery.
How you blend these elements,
Air, Water and
Fire...
The ever-changing shades of soul your eyes give away,
The ever-flowing warmth and sincerity,
The ever-changing breezes, waves, flames...
Morgayn April 7, 1995
This is for someone who is also special to me...the closest I have ever seen
anyone come to releasing their inner-child, the sweetness we hope to find each
and every day of our lives....
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brighn
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response 1 of 7:
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Apr 14 16:11 UTC 1995 |
This one is my favorite so far, perhaps becuase it's the most different
of yours, Morgayn. Passion is o.k., and you write it very well, but it's just
not the genre I usually go for. But this one I like, and I'm surprised
it's the only one without any comments so far.
So here! It has one now. :)
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morgayn
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response 2 of 7:
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Apr 14 16:22 UTC 1995 |
Yes, I was kind of surprised no one had responded to it as of yet. I kind of
like it a lot, too. I can't say it is my favorite, all of these poems kind of
linger together as my favorites. They represent personas to me...They are
the essences of my friends, and I therefore haven't a favorite. But I like
them each in different ways and for different reasons.
This one I like because of the sweetness, the innocence...
Any other comments?
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kami
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response 3 of 7:
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Apr 17 03:45 UTC 1995 |
Aaaahhh! Peaceful. I like it. Someone in class? Or someone else I know?
Um, why do softness and gentility "glitter and melt"? Those are words for
ice. Confused. Why no Earth? (someone else I spoke to, on a particular
day, said she had no earth, but I thought that was just at that moment)
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fraizer
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response 4 of 7:
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Apr 17 18:37 UTC 1995 |
I read this and sat in front of the keypad... nothing happened.
There was nothing for me to say...
so that's what I said.
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anne
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response 5 of 7:
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Apr 17 21:49 UTC 1995 |
fraizer- is that a good thing, or a bad thing?
kami- when I first read this I thought morgayn was saying that it
was the air fire and water that glittered and melted together.
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fraizer
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response 6 of 7:
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Apr 17 22:33 UTC 1995 |
Good. Definitly good. Very good.
I just thought I didn't need to say anything. It was great the way it was
without me stickin' my worthless 2 cents in.
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morgayn
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response 7 of 7:
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Apr 20 00:19 UTC 1995 |
Worthless two cents? Since when is it worthless? *Morgayn frowns*
Anne and Kami- The fire melts...the air fire and water glitter.
Why no earth? Well, I didn't happen to see any earth at that particular
moment in time. As I said, my poetry has a bit of a journalistic facet to
it. I try to record my thoughts and so then preserve them in poetry.
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