Peopm #1 written 4-6-95 by Morgayn

Apr 10 16:26 UTC 1995

Amongst the trees and earth you sat.
Balance.
The sky above you,
The earth below,
The water which flowed in you
The flames that burn...

Eyes of the clearest blue
Remind me of the ocean.
Calm and serene,
Stomrny and choppy,
The waves your eyes create
Lull me.
I am safe within them.

Hair of fire,
Your temples burn.
Flames of passion
Flourish within you.
Eternally,
You burn...
Life, Love and Hope.
Morgayn  April 6, 1995

   Written for yet another who is important to me..."Don't go there, I want to
press the button, AGAIN!"

May the Goddess Bless and keep you, luv.

response 2 of 19:

Apr 12 19:19 UTC 1995

Once again, this poem is not written for someone I wish to 'bed', but someone
who has always been there for me when I have needed them the most. This person
is fire and water, their essence burning in them, at times consuming them...
It is not truly my passion I am trying to convey with this piece, but the
passion this person wreaks of and who, at times, tries to cover it up and 
deny it....Never deny passion....
Once again, thank you, Fraizer...Your compliments cause my cheeks to turn a
permanent shade of rose....*wink*
Now, let's see some of YOUR work and get you into the rose-seat... *I don't
think of it as a 'hot' seat, per se (there's that word...)*

response 4 of 19:

Apr 13 14:43 UTC 1995

*Laugh*
Yes, you are right, most often we associate the word 'passion' with sex. 
However, I prefer to use the word to mean an exorbitent amount of emotion, 
whether this is good or bad is purely up to the person who is administering
the 'passion'. I am passionate about my music, but that doesn't mean I am a 
sicko and I want to 'bed' my instruments. Each of these poems that I have
written, in my opinion, were written with passion, but that doesn't mean I
want to 'bed' all of the subjects. On the contrary, I want to 'bed' only ONE
of the subjects, out of four...*Morgayn blushes*
   Passion is a wonderful thing...This particular person exudes it. Passion is
something which we all should exude. We can learn something from this person...

response 6 of 19:

Apr 14 13:21 UTC 1995

*Morgayn is a bit confused*
What is your 'what' referring to, Fraizer?
   If it is referring to 'what' can we learn from this person? Well, I think 
that honesty and being true to one-self can be learned from this person. Perhap
they don't always LIKE what they see, but they most often choose to deal with 
it rather than try to cover it up... The passion this person exudes is s       
 we should all learn to accept in ourselves and let fly... Does that ansewr
your question, Fraizer? *Morgayn smiles*

response 8 of 19:

Apr 14 16:19 UTC 1995

Well, the lesson we should be learning from this person is that they seem
to allow passion to flow, but they keep it in check...They have found that
fine line and succeed in NOT crossing it... 
"Wheel of Morality, turn turn turn....what is the lesson, we must learn?"
Ha heh.

response 10 of 19:

Apr 17 03:38 UTC 1995

OK, not as amazing as the last couple, but feels good.  I wanted you to
work more with the image you created in the first stanza, to place the
subject more vividly in her environment.  The second stanza seems fine as
it is, but how do you tie "trees and earth" to being like/near the ocean?
Is there a conflict, a comparison, a completion?  The third stanza seems
also to want more- what passion?  what fire? how is it brought out or
caused or used?  How do the three facets fit together?  Each part is 
delightful, but they need a unifying thread or a greater explication of
the theme of one person's complexity.  Oh, and I think I know who the
previous two are for, but I'm not sure of this one.

response 12 of 19:

Apr 20 17:59 UTC 1995

So interpret- how do you think this person does manage to combine these
disperate aspects into one persona?  what connection do you sense?  how does
contact with a person who embodies such a paradox effect or influence you
as the watcher? does it change you or bring closer to gether your own
contradictions, or help you to understand the weirdness of the world? does
this person become a metaphore for other such juxtapositions in life? or is
that irrelevant?  sometimes a personal poem becomes universal, maybe even
by being MORE personal.

response 14 of 19:

Apr 21 16:46 UTC 1995

I was always at the opinion that there are 2 , sometimnes opposing,
issues when wriiting... There is the desire to hvae it be as it
is, whole and untouched. And then there is the very reallearning that
can happen from dissecting and analyzing you work, revising, recreating,
taking new directions.... Which to do, at what times, seems to
be an open question, and depends on your goals, I guess...

I'm sure many songwriters are relentless in their reviosn of their work,
just as sculptors, etc, no?? Hm.....

response 16 of 19:

Apr 24 04:59 UTC 1995

Odye got my intention just right, in response #14.  It may not be necessary
for you to go and change a particular piece in order to learn how to do a
more effective job the next time.  Just looking at it and seeing alternatives
might be enough.  Your work is good, so it's hard for me not to want it to
be just that little bit better.  And once it has done its work of cleansing
and moderating your emotions, then perhaps a poem becomes fair game for
learning better technique.

response 18 of 19:

Apr 25 18:40 UTC 1995

hope it isn't too painful an operation...<sardonic grin>