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markgrif
Some words I wrote Mark Unseen   Sep 24 03:35 UTC 2004

time lost all meaning,
as I entered your room
i was taken away,
by the smell of your perfume
the look on your face,
was of come hither
i could not have left that place,
  if I wanted to.

whispers are sexy,
but the sound of your voice,
has a senuality of it's own

the dark can be inviting,
but with it,
is lost the vision of your form 

when we lie face to face,
before we embrace,
i am as God,
the moment before,
the creation of the world.

it is you I adore
you are my life,
my purpose,
my religion,
and more

A life without you,
would be poor
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arianna
response 1 of 1: Mark Unseen   Oct 9 23:16 UTC 2004

for the most part, I like it; I think it needs less punctuation and more
visual formating.  just an IMO sort of deal.
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