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gerund
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Poem of Hope
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Aug 3 11:04 UTC 1999 |
Here is something for you all to read, since someone recently asked me if I
would ever post another poem. Actually I post most things on my website now:
http://www.angelfire.com/va/gerund in the calm reflections section.
shameless plug, what can i say? ;-) anyhow... here's something for the person
who wanted me to post:
silent hour alone
dreaming for relief
from myself
i ache for it
to engulf my naked
fear, collapse my
soul like cardboard
the end of everything
the struggle put down
laid to rest in a comfort
sleep, no tears
a victorious loss
of the feeling
ache of being
i fall and give
fall and give
myself to you
love, the motive
of your angel hands
holding me
from the terror.
gep
6-1-99
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| 5 responses total. |
arianna
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response 1 of 5:
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Aug 3 11:10 UTC 1999 |
wow. such simple beauty.
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toking
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response 2 of 5:
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Aug 3 13:33 UTC 1999 |
slick...very nice "of the feeling; ache of being" does wonderful things
and I really like the repitition of "fall and give"
good show
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lumen
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response 3 of 5:
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Aug 3 21:58 UTC 1999 |
another wonderful example of eloquence.
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flem
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response 4 of 5:
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Aug 7 04:59 UTC 1999 |
Yes, the repetition of "fall and give" is very effective. I really like
the slow, solemn rhythm of this. Every word seems to have meaning.
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orinoco
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response 5 of 5:
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Aug 8 14:46 UTC 1999 |
"Collapse my / soul like cardboard" is great...either the image of your soul
being like cardboard, or of it collapsing like cardboard collapses, or both.
Neat image.
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